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Ha.

I'm honestly happy she's having fun with it but I'm not going to scumbag her by patting her on the head and saying nice job. If she genuinely wants to be a writer, she needs an editor to manage things like comma usage and sentence structure. This would get torn apart on fan fiction.net and they take anything.

On the other hand, if she has no desire to be an actual writer and this is just some sort of forum fantasy that will never try to be more than a thread of mutual flattery...great success. I mean that.

Silk has not met any of these people yet. I can't describe what she has not seen if it's written from her perspective.  And to answer Legga: It's best not to force feed your readers as if they have no mind of their own. Short descriptions will do, enough to stir the imagination,  so the readers can fill in the gaps with their own tastes.

You have an imagination. It's your story. Why don't you describe us from your own perspective. I think that would be amusing.

Oh I will TK. I know you want gratification now, but you'll just have to wait.  :p

You really should have added the descriptions when you introduced each character. It's not up to the reader to fill in all the gaps. If that were the case, there would be hardly any story worth reading.

You are one needy shit... her writing is spot on for this venue.

Thrill.... I just explained why I can't do that yet. Silk has no idea at this point in the story, what these people look like. When they all get to the meet up, and she sees them face to face, then they will be described.

Silk, bend over. It looks like Virus wants to kiss your ass.

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Thrill.... I just explained why I can't do that yet. Silk has no idea at this point in the story, what these people look like. When they all get to the meet up, and she sees them face to face, then they will be described.

Well, it's your story. I would have written it somewhat differently, but anyway...

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