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I see no cause for insults,  rather enjoyed reading it.

Two sidenotes though:

1. You may want to pay more attention to the cadence (dictus, metric, rhythm) than to rhyme.  Cadence is the backbone of poetry, rhyme is just an embellishment.

2. Latin-based words such as anything ending with ~ation, ~ous etc. make somewhat contrived and clunky rhyme, thus should be avoided as rhyming words.  In fact, they are better be sparingly used (if not altogether avoided) in non-latin-based-language poetry.

Clarity is hewn from passionate throws,
Music, drink, substance and sword,

^ I find those two lines brilliant  (nevermind the form, i approve the content).   You know how to overcome writer's block. 

I wrote it as a bit of therapy when I ran out of ideas for college. Fuck all was coming out, so I thought a medium change might help.

I get the whole -ious and -tion suffix thing seeming lazy. I wrote a massive stream of conscious style poem using just that and I threw it in the bin when I read it back to myself. Apart from that, the structure is depressingly simple.

Edit: I think I went a bit OCD with the syllable count too. More like a game of tetris than a poem.

There's no such thing as depressingly simple. Simple can be perfection all the same as complex. (As is the case with food & all other things as well.)

Syllables - it's not just the count but the weight they carry what puts it into motion.  Also the sounds and their resonance with one another. 

There's a very good book about the structure of poetry by Stephen Fry: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Ode_Less_Travelled  - i don't do poetry at all but i find it a damn good read. Basically the same principles as in algebra, music, geometry, architecture. (That for the form (sensory qualities) - the substance to fill it with you already outlined in those two lines i quoted above.) 

Mind you, english is nt my mothertongue (i haven't even officially learnt it), so you better take anything i write with a pinch of salt (coke or whatever rocks your block).