The woman lays there

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by Apathy

on 5/10/2023

Posts: 39

The woman lays there. Naked. Open. Speechless. Quivering. bruised. Injured. Afraid. Exposed. Falling into pieces.

I take the steel toe of my boot and kick her face in.

Blood splattering up against the glass as a gash is revealed above her left eyebrow.

A look of exhaustion and apathy across her disfigured face.

As the blood trickles from her nose and onto the ground in between her spread shaking legs, I take her face and I burry it into the puddle of blood, making her lap it up off the floor.

The woman cries out in anguish as I smear her red lips onto the filthy floor forcing her to consume her own bodily fluids, a mix of stagnant piss and scarlet.

I smash her head with my boot again, this time the side of her skull between her shoulder and her right ear.

Her gaze disappears as I realize she is dissociated. Her body is here but her mind is not.

I can feel my heart beat pulse alive in my head as the adrenaline blurs my vision. I rip chunks of her limp hair out of her skull, as I hear the ripping of the knotted fibers severing from the sickly skin.

Pools of blood begin forming from where her skin was damaged.

I take my diamond pocket knife as I slowly begin to cut open a slit of flesh and bone.

I make a hole in her head, and stick my penis inside of the hole, as I'm ravaging her brain as if it were a meaningless chunk of meat.

Her labored breathing turns into moans of one who is confused and yet somehow still horrified, laced with a discriminable pain.

I take her foot and begin to bite down on it as I fuck her head, the bones in her feet cracking between my teeth.

She begins spastically flailing, almost as if having a seizure.

And then as I fuck her flailing body her heart stops.

As I ejaculate into her brain, I feel something flooding over my mind.

I look in the mirror and I see a reflection of us, before us. And on the floor, in that mirror, the woman who I am fucking is not the woman I was seeing at all.

But myself.

And I screamed and that is how suddenly, I found myself here, buried under ground in this coffin from which I cannot escape

As I was Osiris as I was to whom I was blind to by choice.

As I continue to be.

last edit on 5/10/2023 9:08:04 AM

by Apathy

on 5/10/2023

Posts: 39

It isn't

last edit on 5/10/2023 9:08:42 AM

by Kate

on 5/10/2023

Posts: 56

Ugh, and did you notice how, like, there was all this violence in there, just for the sake of being edgy? Like, seriously, who thinks that's cool?

Thankfully, my eyes rolled so hard when I saw that, I was able to, like, skip reading half of it. I mean, like, why even bother including that kind of stuff if it doesn't add anything to the story?

It's, like, such a lazy way to try and make something interesting. If you're gonna include violence, at least make it, like, relevant to the plot or something.

I'm so over people thinking that shock value equals good writing. It's just, like, not true! Good writing is about, like, character development and plot and, like, actually making people care about what they're reading.

So, like, let's all just, like, leave the violence and the edginess behind and focus on creating content that's, like, actually worth reading. Who's with me?

by Apathy

on 5/10/2023

Posts: 39

Kate said:
Ugh, and did you notice how, like, there was all this violence in there, just for the sake of being edgy? Like, seriously, who thinks that's cool?

Thankfully, my eyes rolled so hard when I saw that, I was able to, like, skip reading half of it. I mean, like, why even bother including that kind of stuff if it doesn't add anything to the story?

It's, like, such a lazy way to try and make something interesting. If you're gonna include violence, at least make it, like, relevant to the plot or something.

I'm so over people thinking that shock value equals good writing. It's just, like, not true! Good writing is about, like, character development and plot and, like, actually making people care about what they're reading.

So, like, let's all just, like, leave the violence and the edginess behind and focus on creating content that's, like, actually worth reading. Who's with me?

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