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critique poem i wrote for wife pls


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Empty, you found me

My arms, the only place for you to cry

My hands, to grasp when nobody else will

My chest, to lay on for when you lie

My warmth, to rid you of your fears

What can I do if I can't have you?

My heart, to fill with your love

Our house, begins with you, someone I can run to.

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My arms, the only place for you to cry

Sounds a bit possessive. Rest is fine.

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